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 == Chapter 2a - On The Job Training ==
-Ivy: Okay that's two orange juices, two coffees, cheddar omelette with hash browns,
+Ivy: Okay, that's two orange juices, two coffees, cheddar omelette with hash browns, cheddar omelette without hash browns, a short stack with extra maple syrup, and a waffle!
-cheddar omelette without hash browns, a short stack with extra maple syrup, and a waffle!
-Right... You are not a table of four. Uh I'll be right back I am so sorry. Here you go. How else
-do you make French toast? No you look like someone who could use a smiley face on his
-French toast you look you know unfun.
-Female Coworker: Ivy what are you doing.
+(...)
+Ivy: Right... You are not a table of four. Uh... I'll be right back, I am so sorry.
+(...)
+Ivy: Here you go.
+(...)
+Ivy: How else do you make French toast?
+(...)
+Ivy: No. You look like someone who could use a smiley face on his French toast!
+(...)
+Ivy: You look... You know. Unfun.
-Ivy: I'm trying to get that guy to lighten up a little.
+Female Coworker: Ivy. What are you doing?
-Female Coworker: People come here for the food not personal growth.
+Ivy: I'm trying to get that guy to lighten up a little!
-Ivy: Got it. I'll be there in a second sir.
+Female Coworker: People come here for the food, not personal growth.
-Female Coworker: Ivy, ignore them.
+Ivy: Got it.
+(...)
+Ivy: I'll be there in a second, sir!
+(...)
+Female Coworker: Ivy.
+(...)
+Female Coworker: Ignore them.
 == Chapter 2b - Trust In The Process ==
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 Ivy: If they didn't do anything wrong why are they being served.
-Lawyer: Well they might have done something wrong we don't know. All we care about is getting the piece of paper into their hands so they can know they have legal issues,
+Lawyer: Well they might have done something wrong we don't know. All we care about is getting the piece of paper into their hands so they can know they have legal issues, anything after that is not our problem.
-anything after that is not our problem.
 Ivy: Okay so who am I not punching today.
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 == Chapter 3b - Tough Day ==
-Ivy: fine everyone was just so mean, this one family had the rudest children I've ever met.
+(...)
-Some other couple made it very clear how they felt about a gargoyle serving them, and my
-boss got mad at me for putting a smiley face on some French toast. That's what I said! I
+Ivy: Fine.
-really thought it would be different you know like you guys have been so kind to me, the
-Barrio has been so kind to me and those people, it it's not just like they didn't see me, it's
+(...)
-that they didn't want to see me, like I wasn't a person to them. I- I-. I shouldn't be this
-upset, it's stupid. The mob literally tried to kill me and I didn't care this much. I almost
+Ivy: Everyone was just so mean. This one family had the rudest children I've ever met. Some other couple made it very clear how they felt about a gargoyle serving them, and my boss got mad at me for putting a smiley face on some French toast.
-threw someone through a window. I just want tomorrow to be better *Scoffs* will it? Well
-some people don't deserve Grace. It's not fair to be asked to be the bigger person all the
+(...)
-time. People suck. You got it Carlos.
+Ivy: That's what I said! I really thought it would be different, you know. Like, you guys have been so kind to me, the Barrio has been so kind to me and those people... it- it's not just like they didn't see me, it's that they didn't want to see me, like I wasn't a person to them!
+(...)
+Ivy:  I- I shouldn't be this upset, it's stupid.
+(...)
+Ivy: The mob literally tried to kill me and I didn't care this much.
+(...)
+Ivy: I almost threw someone through a window.
+(...)
+Ivy: I just... want tomorrow to be better.
+(...)
+Ivy: [Scoffs] Will it?
+(...)
+Ivy: Well, some people don't deserve grace.
+(...)
+Ivy: It's not fair to be asked to be the bigger person all the time.
+(...)
+Ivy: People suck.
+(...)
+Ivy: You got it, Carlos.
 == Chapter 3c - Career Day ==
-Wraith: How are things going? Mo or Krill? I'll go talk to them.
+Wraith: How are things going?
+Wraith: Mo or Krill?
+Wraith: I'll go talk to them.
 Ivy: Excuse me I'm looking for Miss Wraith?
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 Ivy: I'm sorry for barging into your... totally normal back room.
-Wraith: Social clubs are common in lots of Taylor shops.
+Wraith: Social clubs are common in lots of tailor shops.
-Ivy: I'm not sure that's true anyway you've been served here's the. Sophie, what are you
+Ivy: I'm not sure that's true anyway you've been served here's the. Sophie, what are you doing here? Do you know how much trouble you'll be in if Carlos caught you playing in an illegal poker game?
-doing here? Do you know how much trouble you'll be in if Carlos caught you playing in an
-illegal poker game?
 Wraith: She's not playing, she's just helping with my books.
-Ivy: Oh my God that's worse! I thought you said you had a scholarship! What! She is a
+Ivy: Oh my God that's worse! I thought you said you had a scholarship! What! She is a criminal!
-criminal!
-Wraith: I am a female entrepreneur in a male dominated industry, as far as Role Models go,
+Wraith: I am a female entrepreneur in a male dominated industry, as far as role models go,
 I'm basically Florence Nightingale with a gun.
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 Lash: Oh oh this day just keeps getting better and better.
-Ivy: I'm sorry oh, um Mr. lash it's none of my business but there were some people down
+Ivy: I'm sorry oh, um Mr. lash it's none of my business but there were some people down there waiting for you they didn't look particularly kind.
-there waiting for you they didn't look particularly kind.
 Ivy: Yeah that's why I'm up here.
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 Ivy: But if you want I can scare them off.
-Lash: That's a good one lady, but the Lash isn't running. He just needs a little bit of time to
+Lash: That's a good one lady, but the Lash isn't running. He just needs a little bit of time to figure out whose teeth, he's going to kick in first.
-figure out whose teeth, he's going to kick in first.
 Ivy: You're going to fight them all yourself?

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